IETLS writing task2 Lesson8 Problems and solutions

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.

What do you think are the causes of this?

What solutions can you suggest?

 

1. Read and understand the question

-highlight / understand key parts

 

2. Plan your essay structure (4paragraphs)

-1.Introduction : student behaviour in schools - topic + answer

 variety of reasons, step can be taken to tackle it

-2. Causes of bad student behaviour

-3. My suggested solutions

-4. Conclusion : summarise the problem and steps

 

3. Plan ideas for the two main paragraphs (6 minutes)( above -2-,3)

 

Causes of bad student behaviour-2

 

parents not strict (too lenient),

Children do not accept teachers' instructions or schools rulse,

teachers' fault, no control, bad classroom management,

influence of celebrities who are a bad example

 

My suggested solutions -3 

parents set rules for children, use punishment, show that actions have consequences,

Schools train teachers and parents, discipline techniques, better communication,

famous people act as role models

 

 

Intro

(in problems question you had better answer by using the phrase "It is true")

It is true that the behaviour of school pupils in some parts of the world has been getting worse in recent years.There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can be taken to tackle the problem.

 

paragraph2

(causes of bad student behaviour) (for the way 그런 방식 때문에 for은 여기서 이유,때문에로 해석된다.)

In my opinion, three main factors are to blame for the way young people behave at school nowdays.

Firstly, modern parents tend to be too lenient or permissive. Many children become accustomed to getting whatever they want, and they find it difficult to accept the demands of teachers or the limits imposed on them by school rules.(teacher's fault, no control, bad classroom management)Secondly, if teachers cannot control their students, there must be an issue with quality of classroom management training or support within schools. (influence of celebrity who are a bad example)Finally, children are influenced by the behaviour of celebrities, many of whom set the example that success can be achieved without finishing school.

 

paragrpah3 - my suggested solutions

 

(관계대명사를 쓰고 동사 that it is important + 특정한 동사 이런식으로 길게쓰면된다.)

Student behaviour can certainly be improved. I believe that the change must start with parents, who need to be persuaded that it is important to set firm rules for their children. When children misbehave or break the rules,parents should use reasonable punishments to demonstrate that actions have consequences.

Also,schools could play an important role in training both teachers and parents to use effective disciplinary techniques, and in improving the communication between both groups. At the same time, famous people, such as musicians and football players, need to understand the responsibility that they have to act as role models to children.

 

Conclusion : summarise the problem and steps

In conclusion, schools will continue to face discipline problems unless parents, teachers and public figures set clear rules and demonstrate the right behaviour themselves.

 

Vocabulary : 

• Steps can be taken to tackle the problem
• there main factors are to blame for~
• parents tend to be too lenient or permissive
• children become accustomed to
• limits (that) imposed on them (by school rules)
• quality of classroom management
• celebrities, famous people, public figures
• set an example
• set firm rules, reasonable punishments
• play an important role in 
• effective disciplinary techniques
• responsibility to act as role models
• face discipline problems